Difference between revisions of "Talk:Next Page 2"

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surakshit is a truly wonderful image, the image and the word combined, they express very well what your story is about at that point.
 
  
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the second part of the page needs work to come to life. i think maybe you feel it is a in between stage- he is surakshit and he is beginning to talk of fantasy, so what should you put here? his mother is encouraging- think , i will also try to. but the second part of the page has  to come to life
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the first part of this page is super, super. the surakshit and the image.
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i really really like it.  
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but i also think the two things- the word surakshit and the image of the child and the older hand, expresses all that is in the page- it tells you about the guru and the mother, and both their relationships with the child-  
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therefore the second part of the page, looks dull.
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one solution might be to increase what is written in the page. that is, increase the size of the written story on this page.
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or, now that you have mentioned fantasy, to start pictorally entering the world of fantasy.
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the word 'fantasy' sets off so much in our minds, as soon as we see/hear it. begin, through pictures, to comunicate that idea?

Latest revision as of 00:58, 10 July 2006

the first part of this page is super, super. the surakshit and the image. i really really like it. but i also think the two things- the word surakshit and the image of the child and the older hand, expresses all that is in the page- it tells you about the guru and the mother, and both their relationships with the child- therefore the second part of the page, looks dull.

one solution might be to increase what is written in the page. that is, increase the size of the written story on this page. or, now that you have mentioned fantasy, to start pictorally entering the world of fantasy. the word 'fantasy' sets off so much in our minds, as soon as we see/hear it. begin, through pictures, to comunicate that idea?